Thursday 17 January 2013

The flood

In Literacy we have been learning about journalistic writing. Children have had a go at writing first person accounts of an incident as preparation for including witness statements in their newspaper articles. Here is Eli and Cvonne's work.

There was a deep dark murderous rumble from the beautiful hills. Trees were rapidly disintegrated like they were never there. The stench of death loomed all around. Suddenly black silky water shot up into the grey silent air. Posh cars were bought clean off their feet into the rumbling mouth of the watery cave. Nothing or no one could stand in its way. The lucky survivors made their way up. Up, up to safety. I felt like it was every man for themselves but I couldn’t help worrying, worrying not only for my family but for my friends. My mind drifted away to another world  and I felt tears in my eyes as I saw old, Mrs. Drapper stumble up her stairs but I could save my emotions for later, right now I have to make sure I have a later! I crawled onto my messy roof. For now thankfully I was safe. Eli.

The water was like a bull nothing can stop it when it’s mad. My mum and dad saw the flood so they climbed up to the roof with me in front. As we reached the roof the water was not far behind. I have never seen water move that fast. It was like the world’s fastest car making clones of itself. The flood has started its path of darkness. But the flood is not easily stopped. It was like donkey Kong and donkey Kong Jr were trying to get a golden banana. I asked myself would this change my life now this beast is here or would it be the same?   Cvonne

Friday 11 January 2013

Bre-nancy and the 13 Plantains.

In Literacy we have been looking at dramatic conventions. Here is Javarne's play script based on the story 'Bre-nancy and the 13 Plantains'


Bre-nancy and the 13 Plantains
Scene 1: In the house Ma-nancy and Bre-nancy are arguing about who should get food.
Ma-nancy:   Bre-nancey get out of the house and get food for me and the children. Don’t make me use this broom!
Bre-nancy: But me nuh have nuh money!
Ma-nancy:   Well get some.
Bre-nancy:  It’s not fair! (sulking)
Ma-nance chases Bre-nancy out of the house with the broom.
Bre-nancy:  Ok I’m going!
Ma-nancy slams the door
End of scene 1
Scene 2: On a dusty road Bre-nancy sees Reggie the bush rat holding lots of plantain.
Bre-nancy: Reggie where did you get all of that plantain?
Reggie:        That a me hard working salary
Bre-nancy: Reggie Can I have some?
Reggie:        No way man!
Bre-nancy:  Please, just for my kids and my wife.
Reggie:        Ok, only this once.
Bre-nancy takes 13 plantains and goes home.
End of scene 2      
Scene 3: Back in the house
Bre-nancy:  Me come back wife with some food.
Ma-nancy:   Me a come.
Bre-nancy:  See here, 13 plantains, enough for you and the kids.


Ma-nancy cooks the plantains and serves the family. There is no food for Bre-nancy so he just sits there with a sad face.
Child1:        Do you want some of mine Dad?
Bre-nancy: No, it’s yours
Child1:        Do you want some? It’s ok.
Bre-nancy:            Well if you insist then yes!
Child2:      Have some of mine.
Child3:        and mine.
Child4:        and some of mine!
All the children give their Dad half of their plantain.
Ma-nancy:  But wait! How much plantain you eat? Huh? Huh?
Bre-nancy couldn’t work it out and quickly left the table and went for a walk outside.
End of scene 3