Mariam - A super diary extract Mariam. You have presented your work really well. I am pleased that you are trying to use a range of sentence types, including complex sentences. You have taken on the role of a character well and described your anger well.
Jahniah - Jahniah I can see you have worked hard on this piece of work and I know that you a rightly very proud of it. I am really pleased that you have incorporated ideas from the original text into your own work. You have thought carefully about how Zeus might feel and what he might say. Well done.
shanez when you went into my class and read your pandoras box story it was so fantastic it was like one of the teachrs writing i can not belive my eyes well done
WELL DONE JANNIAH I LIKE YOUR WONDERFUL PIECE OF THE DIARY EXTRACT I CAN SEE YOU HAVE PUT ALOT OF EFFORT ON THAT DIARY EXTRACT.I CAN SEE THE COMPOUND SENTENCE'S AND THE RIGHT PIECE OF PUNCTUATION YOU HAVE SUPERB ADJECTIVES AND MOUNBUT YOU SHOULD IMPROVE ON WRITTING A LONGER PIECE OTHER THAN THAT JANNIAH YOUR WORK IS OUTSTANING.GGGGOOOOOOODDDD
a superb diary extract mariam,you have used a wide range of sentences including complex sentences.i love how you have presented your work brilliantly.you have described your anger exellently.keep up the outstanding work!!
I really like the diary because it looks real.from hannah
ReplyDeleteMariam - A super diary extract Mariam. You have presented your work really well. I am pleased that you are trying to use a range of sentence types, including complex sentences. You have taken on the role of a character well and described your anger well.
ReplyDeleteJahniah - Jahniah I can see you have worked hard on this piece of work and I know that you a rightly very proud of it. I am really pleased that you have incorporated ideas from the original text into your own work. You have thought carefully about how Zeus might feel and what he might say. Well done.
mariam your work is outstanding its amazing.you've put alot of effet in your work.Its like i'm writing right now.I love it!
ReplyDeleteJahniah your work is amazing your diary looks almost like a really diary.Jahniah I surdested you worked hard on that.
ReplyDeletemariam,jahnia i can see that you have put lost of effet into.and i like the daecoration in your work.well done
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outstanding! jahniah what a piece of work you,ve done.FAB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Well done chap. from xantaine
ReplyDeletewell done jahniah fab WHAT WORK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteJahniah your work is outstanding. You have put a lot off effort in your work over the last couple of weeks. Your Pandora's box work is brilliant.
ReplyDeleteMariama and Gurdeep i have seen your work WHAT FAB
ReplyDeleteJahniah your work is brilliant i liked paragraph 3 and 4 it was out standing.
ReplyDeleteGurdeep and Ellen your work is fab if i was mrs packer i would send it to birimingham city council
ReplyDeleteCalum your work is fantastic good work calum
ReplyDeleteDamiloloa you work is fantastic so is your speach for school counclil.
ReplyDeleteshanez when you went into my class and read your pandoras box story it was so fantastic it was like one of the teachrs writing i can not belive my eyes well done
ReplyDeletecalum your work is amazing well done and kepp up the good work tho
ReplyDeleteJahniah i love your work it's amazing i think it looks like a real diary d^_^b.
ReplyDeletemariam i love your letter paragraph 4 and 3 it's i love the way you used the backround
ReplyDeleteShanaz i have your work it is FAB
ReplyDeleteMariama ive seen your work it is OUTSTANDING i liked everything about it
ReplyDeleteMariam I really liked your work beacuse I like your really old background and old stlye writing
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i think you have put an effet in your work the look of the old page makes it fantastic
WELL DONE JANNIAH I LIKE YOUR WONDERFUL PIECE OF THE DIARY EXTRACT I CAN SEE YOU HAVE PUT ALOT OF EFFORT ON THAT DIARY EXTRACT.I CAN SEE THE COMPOUND SENTENCE'S AND THE RIGHT PIECE OF PUNCTUATION YOU HAVE SUPERB ADJECTIVES AND MOUNBUT YOU SHOULD IMPROVE ON WRITTING A LONGER PIECE OTHER THAN THAT JANNIAH YOUR WORK IS OUTSTANING.GGGGOOOOOOODDDD
ReplyDeleteWELL DONE JANNIAH I LIKE YOUR PICE OF THE DIARY
ReplyDeletea superb diary extract mariam,you have used a wide range of sentences including complex sentences.i love how you have presented your work brilliantly.you have described your anger exellently.keep up the outstanding work!!
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